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Call it a cliché makeover.

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Revive or reimagine a cliché

Call it a cliché makeover.

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Breathe new life into a tired cliché by extending or otherwise playing with it. Image by pixieme

Warren Buffett, chairman of Berkshire Hathaway, breathes new life into old, worn-out phrases in a letter to shareholders. His secret: extending the original metaphor the cliché was based on:

Scott Moser, the CEO of Equitas, summarized the transaction neatly: “Names wanted to sleep easy at night, and we think we’ve just bought them the world’s best mattress.”

By extending the cliché “sleep easy at night” with “the world’s best mattress,” Buffett gives this tired phrase new life. (Back story: Berkshire reinsured Equitas so its “names,” or underwriters, don’t have to worry about huge claims bankrupting the firm and themselves).

A metaphor is a figure of speech that helps people make a semantic shift, aka think differently about your topic. Cliché —  also called dead metaphors — just make readers eyes glaze over.

Next time you find yourself writing a historical metaphor (time is running out, flying off the handle, head over heels, max black), try one of these approaches to resurrecting a metaphor:

1. Reinvent a cliché.

A.G. Edwards uses this technique in its Silver Anvil-winning “nest egg” ad series. The investment firm reinvents one of my least-favorite clichés by making it visual and extending it as far as it can go.

Reinvent a cliche
Securing your investment A.G. Edwards reinvents the nest egg in this new ad campaign.

Instead of eliminating your next cliché, see if you can take it further. By doing so, you might just resurrect it.

2. Refresh a cliché.

You might also try refreshing a cliché. To refresh a cliché:

  1. Circle all the clichés in your message
  2. Refresh them by writing a new ending

Get inspiration from this list. Story goes that it was created when a first-grade teacher collected clichés and asked her students to come up with new endings for tired clichés.

  • A penny saved is … not much 
  • Better safe than … punch a fifth-grader 
  • Don’t bite the hand that … looks dirty 
  • If at first you don’t succeed … get new batteries 
  • It’s always darkest before … Daylight Savings Time 
  • You can lead a horse to water but … how? 
  • You can’t teach an old dog new … math 

Hey! If a group of first-graders can do it, imagine how engaging your “new clichés” will be.

3. Twist a cliché.

You can also “Twist a cliche.” To do that, sub out a traditional word in the cliché for a new one.

Instead of dog tired, for instance, ask, “Who else is really tired? New mothers? People working double shifts? Hospital interns?”

4. More ways to revive a cliché.

Here are four more ways to breathe new life into old, worn-out phrases in the body of an essay:

  1. Reverse a cliché. Replace a key word in the cliché with one that means the opposite. One character on “The Closer,” for instance, “compliments” another on a eulogy: “There wasn’t a wet eye in the house.”
  2. Combine clichés. Put two clichés together to create a fresh phrase. Lyrics to one “Flight of the Conchords” song, for instance, go, “The fork in the road cuts like a knife.”
  3. Twist a cliché. Go through the letters of the alphabet to change the word. Or rearrange the letters in the word. Or add an incorrect word or phrase. Or substitute a double-entendre for a common word.

What dead metaphor can you resurrect in your own message?

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Try Ann Wylie’s Metaphor Generator https://www.wyliecomm.com/2023/01/metaphor-generator/ https://www.wyliecomm.com/2023/01/metaphor-generator/#respond Mon, 02 Jan 2023 09:06:18 +0000 https://www.wyliecomm.com/?p=31526 Take these 4 steps to creating an analogy

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Take these 4 steps to creating an analogy

Sometimes you’ll find a metaphor in an interview. Other times, it’s up to you to create one yourself.

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See the light Develop a metaphor with Ann’s 4-step Metaphor Generator. Image by svetazi

When you find yourself in that situation, try my four-part Metaphor Generator:

Here’s how it works:

1. Jot down the unfamiliar item.

This is the concept you plan to compare. For one group of agricultural writers, that concept was “genetic mapping.”

2. Note the key attribute.

What is it about the unfamiliar topic that you want audience members to understand? In the case of the agricultural writers, the key attribute was that genetic mapping helps ranchers predict the future.

The more tangible and colloquial your key attribute is, the easier it will be to …

3. List familiar items that share the key attribute.

For “predict the future,” for instance, the list might include:

The more concrete and specific these familiar items are, the better the metaphor. For instance: “Dionne Warwick,” “1-800-PSYCHIC” and “Miss Cleo” will all yield better metaphors than “psychic.”

Keep pushing — the more items you list at this step, the more interesting and sophisticated the resulting metaphor will be. Brainstorming in a group might help: More heads are better than one on this step.

4. Craft a metaphor.

Connect the unfamiliar item to the familiar item by means of the key attribute they both share.

Then craft your metaphor with my Metaphor Template.

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My writing team had one of those tough assignments recently that only a geek like me can fully appreciate.

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Go beyond the interview

My writing team had one of those tough assignments recently that only a geek like me can fully appreciate.

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4 ways to research metaphor 1) Ask your subject-matter expert; 2) Use Google as your dictionary; 3) Research online; 4) Get a quick online education. Image by svetazi

Our job: to transform technical medical text into a fascinating research report that patients, donors and neurointerventionalists alike can understand and enjoy. In some sections, superstar writer Dawn Grubb literally had to look up and define a term in every sentence.

But definitions and descriptions take you only so far. Sometimes it takes an analogy to fully explain technical topics to readers. So I was delighted to read this passage by Dawn:

Think of functional mapping as the Google Earth of the brain. Like Google Earth, functional mapping creates extremely sophisticated 3-D, real-time images.

Google Earth allows users to zoom in on its satellite images to see the smallest detail — from continent, to country, to state, to city, to street, to building. With functional mapping, our doctors can view the whole brain’s structure and activity the same way — down to its regions, functional lobes, neuron bundles, individual neurons, and neuron particles.

Writing complex copy? Add an analogy.

Here’s how:

1. Ask your subject-mattter expert.

Sometimes, all you need to do to get a comparison is to ask. The question to ask to get a metaphor is “What’s it like?”

That’s the approach Roger von Oech, author of A Whack on the Side of the Head, recommends. His workshop participants ask:
“What’s it like?” to create metaphors for the meaning of life. Two of my favorites:

Life is like an unassembled abacus. It’s what you make of it that counts.
Life is like a maze in which you try to avoid the exit.

To help your subject-matter expert provide an analogy that anyone can understand, ask the question:

If you were explaining this concept to a class of third graders, what would you say it was like?

2.  Ask Google a question.

But what do you do when it’s just you and a ream of technical documents with no human expert in sight? That’s when Dawn and I turn to our best friend and research assistant, Google, for help.

Dawn started her search on neurointerventionalists by typing “What is brain mapping?” into the Google search box. The results took her to an almost poetic answer at How Stuff Works, one of my favorite Websites for defining, describing and comparing technical terms.

At How Stuff Works, you can learn enough about complicated processes and procedures — from LASIK surgery to liposuction, from cloning to currency — to be able to describe them in conversational terms. And, if you’re as lucky as Dawn was, you might find a good analogy there, as well.

3. Turn Google into a thesaurus.

Just type “define: term” into Google’s search box. You’ll get all the definitions of your terms that appear on the Web — and you just might get a free, bonus analogy.

For a blog post, I recently Googled “define: cochlear implant.” One result included this analogy:

The cochlear implant is often referred to as a bionic ear.

My lead for the blog post:

Think of a cochlear implant as a bionic ear.

4. Get a quick education online.

Once you’ve chosen your analogy, you need to develop it.

When I was developing a horse-racing analogy for a behavioral finance article in a mutual fund company’s marketing magazine, I needed a lot of help.

I turned to OneLook Reverse Dictionary and looked up horse-racing to brush up on the vocabulary. This tool lets you describe a concept to get a list of words and phrases related to that concept.

Then I looked at Wikipedia’s horse-racing page for a fast education on the topic.

Between these two resources, I found enough anecdotes and analogies, facts and phrases and images and ideas to develop extended analogies for several articles. Here’s one section of the final piece:

Don’t lose by a head.

In the 1957 Kentucky Derby, jockey Bill Shoemaker misjudged the finish line and stopped riding Gallant Man for just a moment. That move gave Iron Liege and Bill Bartack the victory.

There are a lot of inches in a 1 3/16-mile race, and Gallant Man lost by just a few of them.

There are a lot of decisions in a lifetime of investing, and your portfolio can get beaten by a few bad ones. Here are four common emotional investing missteps to avoid …

Find and develop your analogy.

Don’t have access to a subject-matter expert? That’s no reason not to add an analogy to make your technical topic easier to understand. Instead, use Google and other online tools to identify and develop analogies for your complex concept.

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Quick! Which is more effective?

A simple metaphor?

Bobby Holloway says my imagination is a three-hundred-ring circus.
— Dean Koontz in Seize the Night

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The gift that keeps on giving

Quick! Which is more effective?

How to write an extended metaphor
Extend that metaphor Extended metaphors are twice as effective as simple metaphors. To write an extended metaphor, dig into your base. Image by svetazi

A simple metaphor?

Bobby Holloway says my imagination is a three-hundred-ring circus.
— Dean Koontz in Seize the Night

Or an extended metaphor?

Bobby Holloway says my imagination is a three-hundred-ring circus. Currently I was in ring two hundred and ninety-nine, with elephants dancing and clowns cart wheeling and tigers leaping through rings of fire. The time had come to step back, leave the main tent, go buy some popcorn and a Coke, bliss out, cool down.
— Dean Koontz in Seize the Night

The extended metaphor — one that continues through a series of sentences — is nearly twice as persuasive as a simple metaphor, according to Pradeep Sopory and James Price Dillard’s review of 50 years of research.

So extend your metaphors.

Proper investment advice is like bespoke tailoring.

When I was editing a mutual fund company’s marketing magazine, we decided to compare customized investment advice to bespoke tailoring.

We could sustain that from the headline …

Perfect fit

… through the deck …

One size never really does fit all. Here’s how to tailor your portfolio to your own needs and dreams

… through the subheads …

Measure twice, cut once

Tailored fit

Start with these patterns

… through subtle references throughout the article …

Your friend’s sartorial splendor might well be baggy around the collar on you. The perfect portfolio for you is one that meets your own needs, takes into account your comfort with risk and helps you achieve your dreams.

Ready-to-wear models that split your ideal allocation into stock and bond slices depending on your age are a starting point. But the perfect portfolio isn’t just about how old you are. After all, if you ask 10 people where they want to be in 10 years, you’ll get 10 answers.

A more tailored approach meets a broad range of needs and takes advantage of the diverse array of investment options — from blue chips to emerging markets — in proportions that make sense at your stage.

See Ann’s extended metaphor on horseback racing.

How to write an extended metaphor

So how do you write an extended metaphor?

First, you need to understand the mathematics of metaphor. The math behind this literary device is simple:

X = Y.

Meaning passes from the base to the target, from Y to X. In “Romeo and Juliet,” William Shakespeare writes:

Juliet is the sun.

Or:

X [Juliet] is Y [the sun].

Metaphor links X to Y:

X is the target.
Y is the base.

Then extend your metaphor by exploring the base. Here’s how:

1. Choose your base.

“If you want to try an extended metaphor, think carefully about your comparison entity,” writes Nancy Kress in Writer’s Digest.

“Choose something that is specific and concrete, like a diamond. Then jot down three or more similarities between that and your original object or situation. Finally, describe the latter in terms of the former, playing with the actual words until the comparisons are both clear and enlightening.”

The sun, maybe.

2. Explore your base.

Now delve deeper into the base to find more specific elements:

  • Light
  • East
  • Moon
  • Etc.

3. Compare your topic to these elements.

Now construct metaphors comparing your topic to the items on your list. Here’s Shakespeare:

But soft! What light through yonder window breaks?
It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.
Arise, fair sun, and kill the envious moon,
Who is already sick and pale with grief …

Extend metaphors like William Shakespeare

See how Emily Dickinson extends her base, a bird, in “Hope Is a Thing With Feathers”:

“Hope” is the thing with feathers —
That perches in the soul —
And sings the tune without the words —
And never stops — at all —
And sweetest — in the Gale — is heard —
And sore must be the storm —
That could abash the little Bird
That kept so many warm —

You’ll see an extended base in Robert Frost’s “The Road Not Taken” (“Two roads diverged in a yellow wood …”) And in Animal Farm by George Orwell. In fact, you’ll find this literary device in all of the best writing.

Why not yours?

Caravaggio is like chiaroscuro.

In Caravaggio: A Life Sacred and Profane, Andrew Graham-Dixon compares the artist to the chiaroscuro — the lightest lights and darkest darks — of his paintings. Notice how the author explores the base to extend the metaphor:

He was one of the most electrifyingly original artists ever to have lived …
He lived much of his life as a fugitive, and that is how he is preserved in history — a man on the run, heading for the hills, keeping to the shadows.
But he is caught, now and again, by the sweeping beam of a searchlight.
His youth is the least documented period of his existence — the darkest time, in every sense, of this life of light and darkness.
But in its shadows may be found some of the most important clues to the formation of his turbulent personality.
Suddenly here is Caravaggio, caught in the flashbulb glare of a barber’s memory: “This painter is a stocky young man, about twenty or twenty-five years old, with a thin black beard, thick eyebrows and black eyes, who goes dressed all in black, in a rather disorderly fashion, wearing black hose that is a little bit threadbare, and who has a thick head of hair, long over his forehead.”

Bellori, echoing Vasari’s idea that artists resemble their own work, wrote that “Caravaggio’s style corresponded to his physiognomy and appearance; he had a dark complexion and dark eyes, and his eyebrows and hair were black; this colouring was naturally reflected in his paintings … driven by his own nature, he retreated to the dark style that is connected to his disturbed and contentious temperament.”

How can you explore your base to extend your metaphor?

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Sources: James Geary, “Metaphorically Speaking,” TedTalks, July 2009

*Nancy Kress, “O My Luve’s Like A Red, Red Rose,” Writer’s Digest, February 2000

George Lakoff and Mark Johnson, Metaphors We Live By, University of Chicago Press, 2003

Pradeep Sopory and James P. Dillard, “The Persuasive Effects of Metaphor: A Meta-Analysis,” Human Communication Research, July 2002

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3 ways to craft clever figures of speech

When a Hollywood pitchman wants to sell a new horror film about a rampaging dog, he doesn’t have time to explain the storyline. Instead of “then he did this, then he did that,” he might say:

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Better than the muse Want to write great metaphors? Practice these 3 approaches for creating vivid analogies. Image by svetazi
“Think ‘Jaws’ on paws.”

Similes and metaphors are a great way to help readers understand your message. Make sure you’re moving beyond cliches — heart of stone, white as snow — and mixed metaphors to create comparisons that grab readers’ attention and help them see your ideas in a new light.

That’s just one of three ways to develop metaphors that work:

1. Anchor and twist.

Call it “anchor and twist.” To say more with less, anchor your idea to something your audience understands, then twist it to show how your concept is different from the original.

1. Anchor. “Anchoring is easier than explaining from scratch,” write Chip Heath and Dan Heath, authors of Made to Stick.

“Wikipedia says an alpaca is ‘a domesticated species of the South American camelid.’ That’s the explanation. Or, you could say an alpaca is like a small llama. Which one is easier to understand?”

In this case, “Jaws” is the anchor.

2. Twist. Highlight the differences as well as the similarities. In this case, “on paws” is the twist.

3. Try it. Here’s a fill-in-the-blanks template for an anchor-and-twist metaphor:

Think of _______ [your topic]
as  ________ [anchor]
for/but/with/on ___________ [twist].

You might even get an extended metaphor from this approach. 

Use this formula for a lead or sound bite in your next piece.

2. Play the metaphor game.

In A Writer’s Coach, Jack Hart shares this story:

“In A Moveable Feast, Hemingway recalls the days when he and Fitzgerald careered through the Spanish countryside in an open car, playing the metaphor game.

“One would point to an object as it came into view. The other would generate a figure of speech involving it. If he succeeded immediately, the other took his turn. If he failed, he took a drink from a jug of wine and tried again.”

Practice makes perfect. How could you play at making metaphors to polish your skills at writing analogy?

3. Practice the Popcorn Project.

In my Master the Art of Storytelling workshops, we practice observational research with the Popcorn Project. 

Get some popcorn. (Go ahead. I’ll wait.) Then ask yourself:

“What’s it like?”

Try it! You’ll find that your writing becomes more rich and interesting when you go beyond listing adjectives — white and yellow, dry, bumpy — and start using your senses to compare.

Here are some of my favorite descriptions by workshop attendees:

The raucous crowd of popcorn has the filmy finish of a satin dress that’s been thrown across the room and landed in a soft lump on the carpet.
It’s the taste of Saturday-night movies, huddled with friends, our chatter filling the night air. It’s like an old friend, reminding me of youth, first kisses and whispers in the night.
This popcorn tastes like it was popped last month and shipped across the country in a slow-moving vehicle that stopped at each rest stop the driver passed.

How an you create vivid metaphors and similes that make your messages for compelling and comprehensible?

___

Sources: Anna Muoio, “Meet Hollywood’s Mr. Pitch,” Fast Company, November 1999

Chip Heath and Dan Heath, Made to Stick, Random House, 2007

Chip Heath and Dan Heath, “Selling Your Innovation: Anchor and Twist,” Fast Company, July 1, 2008

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Do sync with the subject, don’t write a groaner

Don’t mix metaphors. Fewer are more persuasive. Choose one concept for comparison and stick with it.

Mix metaphor
Get the message across One metaphor is more persuasive than more. Choose a single metaphor, and stick with it. Image by svetazi

Here are some other metaphor do’s and don’ts:

DO sync with the subject.

Match your metaphor to your message’s topic and tone.

I once found a participant in one of my writing workshops comparing her company’s new shopping mall to “the phoenix rising from the ashes.” Not only was that a cliché, it was also the wrong comparison and tone for the topic — not to mention the wrong scale.

“Thunderous dunks and lightning-quick running backs offend the serious reader in two ways: 1) They are clichés; and 2) They are questionable, even as hyperbole,” writes Steve Wilson, sports writer, Fort Worth Star-Telegram. “Unless we can create a fresh image or make a strong case for hyperbole, we should equate forces of nature with acts of humanity.”

The best metaphors are appropriate to the topic, tone, occasion and audience.

Sync with the topic. The more your metaphor draws from the topic, the more elegant the result will be, as this passage from a Time magazine movie review of sensational summer movies illustrates:

Instead of leaving the theater with a rosy glow or warm tears, dyna-moviegoers feel like a James Bond vodka martini. They have been shaken but not stirred.

Sync with the audience. This metaphor from Speechwriter’s Newsletter is in perfect sync with the audience:

I hope your holidays were holidays and that, when they were over, your brain began to hum like an old IBM Selectric.

DON’T overdo it.

A 6-course metaphorical feast can be too rich to digest — and can make your reader feel a bit nauseated after. Break it up with some plain-vanilla explanation.

“Cram three similes into a single paragraph and you become a parody,” writes Jack Hart in A Writer’s Coach. “Write page after page of featureless prose and you become a drudge. So work your way through a rough draft eliminating and adding color. A figure of speech every third of fourth paragraph is usually about right.”

Try Hart’s recommendation:

Limit your metaphors to one every three or four paragraphs or so.

Communicate, don’t decorate. The key: Make sure your metaphors don’t distract from your message. So ask, “Is this metaphor architecture? Or interior design?”

Don’t write a groaner.

Metaphors can be great. They can grab attention, clarify complex concepts and entertain your readers.

But sometimes writers, working toward a metaphor, reach too far and wind up writing a groaner instead. Take these, from an article in the latest issue of Women’s Health magazine:

Not that you should squirm like a toddler-tortured caterpillar during a workout.

Your power levels are at their highest, so make the most of them by going hard and sweating like a wool-wearing Floridian.

I don’t know about you, but I’m sweating like a wool-wearing Floridian just reading this.

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Years ago, I ran across this passage Stephen Schiff wrote about Australian film director Fred Schepisi for The New Yorker:

As Schepisi talks, his hands play along: they’re the nipping boat, they’re the foaming river; when they clap, they’re the waterfall.

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Read for technique, not just for information and entertainment

Years ago, I ran across this passage Stephen Schiff wrote about Australian film director Fred Schepisi for The New Yorker:

How do you read like a writer?
Don’t just read as a reader. Read as a writer. Image by fizkes
As Schepisi talks, his hands play along: they’re the nipping boat, they’re the foaming river; when they clap, they’re the waterfall. He’s not a tall man, but his billowing midriff and cowboy swagger convey an impression of size. His hair is long and lank and strawberry blond, and he’s currently making one of his periodic stabs at a beard: it’s growing in little red islands.

Schepisi is fifty-three now, but his frisky, ingenuous demeanor makes him seem much younger. He has a great, probing snout and merry little eyes, and these things, along with an enormous, face-splitting grin, put you in mind of a dolphin inviting you in for a splash.

Later, I interviewed a startup president whose gestures reminded me of Schiff’s Schepisi. I noted the entrepreneur’s hand movements and wrote this lead:

As Jeff McMurphy speaks, his hands move along: They spread, and they’re the Tandem computer; they arc, and they’re the ISDN line. When they meet, they’re the relationship between McMurphy’s company and its clients.

When McMurphy gets excited, his hands move faster. And when he talks about using technology to help people work better, easier and faster, they move very fast, indeed.

It’s definitely not Schiff — today, I shudder at the verb move — but it’s a whole lot better than it would have been without Schiff.

Don’t just read as a reader.

To model the masters, make sure you’re not just reading as a reader.

Readers read for information and entertainment. Writers read for information and entertainment, too. But they also read for something else: technique.

Another writer might introduce you to a new way of crafting a headline, mastering a metaphor, structuring a story or describing gestures.

How do you read as a writer? Every time you read your favorite books or a piece of creative writing you love, focus on technique, not just the story. You’ll learn to read for writing, not just for pleasure and information.

How do you separate your reader from your writer so you can see the technique?

  • Move from your pleasure-reading spot. I do my writer-reading on planes and at my desk. I read as a reader on my couch or in bed. Read the book or other piece in the right spot.
  • Before you start reading, gather the right tools. Reading like a writer used to take highlighters, pencils and sticky notes. Now I use my Kindle’s clippings and notes features to capture great passages and write myself notes about them.
  • Don’t get swept away. The problem with reading as a writer is that when you read the good stuff, you can get lost in the prose. When you feel this happening, force yourself to snap out of it and focus again on technique.

I never would have remembered Schiff’s passage when I needed it if I’d read it only as a reader. But because I had my writer hat on — because I noticed and studied the technique — I was able to take Schiff’s approach into my toolkit.

Create a clip file.

While you’re reading, look for passages to save and study. Every time you hear yourself saying, “I wish I’d written that,” “that” goes into your clip file.

The result will be an archive of tantalizing twists of phrase, powerful plays on words and stunning snippets of storytelling. Then, when you need to write a creative passage, you can dip into your clips and riff off of one of your favorites.

One of the passages in my clip file is:

After getting steamed in a sauna, soaked in a whirlpool, kneeded from head to toe, massaged by warm water jets, scrubbed with scented exfoliating creams, rubbed with custom-blended oils, wrapped in warm towels, and otherwise buffed, polished, creamed, and swaddled, even the most stressed-out work junkie leaves the Aveda Spa Retreat feeling weak-kneed and rejuvenated.

When I invited participants in a workshop to model that passage, one wrote:

After driving from dealership to dealership, having your back slapped and your arm pumped, hearing this half truth and that outright lie, being offered cup after cup of tepid coffee and watching your credit card history get inspected under a microscope — even the most stressed-out soul can leave Ugly Duckling Automotive in a shiny, clean car with your name on the title.

In another workshop, a P.R. agency’s accountant — the accountant! — modeled that passage to come up with this sentence:

After being swindled by a wolf, bitten by a shark, taxed by a giant, outwitted by a bear and bucked from a bull, you can find comfort and security in a Prudential Mutual Fund.

If an accountant (did I mention it was the accountant?!) can come up with that passage, imagine what you can do!
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Source: Stephen Schiff, “A Cinematic Gallant,” The New Yorker, Dec. 20, 1993, p. 60

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What is the purpose of a metaphor? https://www.wyliecomm.com/2021/04/what-is-the-purpose-of-a-metaphor/ https://www.wyliecomm.com/2021/04/what-is-the-purpose-of-a-metaphor/#respond Mon, 19 Apr 2021 10:22:00 +0000 https://www.wyliecomm.com/?p=26447 Metaphor is like Elvis; it shakes us up

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Metaphor is like Elvis; it shakes us up

Why metaphor?

What is the purpose of a metaphor?
The King of metaphor In ‘All Shook Up,’ a touch is a chill, lips are volcanoes and she is a buttercup. Image by Sergey Goryachev

Metaphor is a literary device that helps readers understand, pay attention, remember and act on messages. Metaphor is a figure of speech in which a word or phrase is applied to an object or action to which it is not literally applicable: Lips are volcanoes, for instance.

What is the purpose of a metaphor? Use metaphor, says James Geary, author of The Secret Life of Metaphor, because:

1. Metaphor is around us daily.

“Metaphor lives a secret life all around us,” he says. “We utter about six metaphors a minute. Metaphorical thinking is essential to how we understand ourselves and others, how we communicate, learn, discover and invent. But metaphor is a way of thought before it is a way with words.”

2. Metaphor makes messages vivid.

William Shakespeare used metaphor. So did Elvis Presley.

“Now, ‘All Shook Up’ is a great love song,” Geary says. “It’s also a great example of how whenever we deal with anything abstract — ideas, emotions, feelings, concepts, thoughts — we inevitably resort to metaphor.

“In ‘All Shook Up,’ a touch is not a touch, but a chill. Lips are not lips, but volcanoes. She is not she, but a buttercup. And love is not love, but being all shook up.”

3. Metaphor creates expectations.

“Pay careful attention the next time you read the financial news,” Geary says. “Agent metaphors describe price movements as the deliberate action of a living thing, as in, ‘The NASDAQ climbed higher.’ Object metaphors describe price movements as non-living things, as in, ‘The Dow fell like a brick.’

“Researchers asked a group of people to read a clutch of market commentaries, and then predict the next day’s price trend. Those exposed to agent metaphors had higher expectations that price trends would continue. And they had those expectations because agent metaphors imply the deliberate action of a living thing pursuing a goal.”

Would agent or object metaphors best help you set the right expectations?

4. Metaphor influences decisions.

“A group of students was told that a small democratic country had been invaded and had asked the U.S. for help,” Geary says. “And they had to make a decision. What should they do? Intervene, appeal to the U.N., or do nothing?

“They were each then given one of three descriptions of this hypothetical crisis. Each of which was designed to trigger a different historical analogy: World War II, Vietnam, and the third was historically neutral.

“Those exposed to the World War II scenario made more interventionist recommendations than the others. Just as we cannot ignore the literal meaning of words, we cannot ignore the analogies that are triggered by metaphor.”

5. Metaphor opens the door to discovery.

“Einstein described his scientific method as ‘combinatory play,’” Geary says. “He famously used thought experiments, which are essentially elaborate analogies, to come up with some of his greatest discoveries. By bringing together what we know and what we don’t know through analogy, metaphorical thinking strikes the spark that ignites discovery.”

6. Metaphor shakes things up.

“Metaphor shakes things up, giving us everything from Shakespeare to scientific discovery in the process,” Geary says. “The mind is a plastic snow dome, the most beautiful, most interesting, and most itself, when, as Elvis put it, it’s all shook up. And metaphor keeps the mind shaking, rattling and rolling, long after Elvis has left the building.”

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Source: James Geary, “Metaphorically Speaking,” TedTalks, July 2009

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People learn through metaphor

When my grandfather first saw a car, he didn’t think “automobile.” He thought, “That’s a carriage that moves without a horse — it’s a horseless carriage.”

Why is a metaphor effective?
Baby, you can drive my car Grandpa didn’t know from automobiles; he called this a horseless carriage. Analogies help people understand new ideas by linking them to familiar ones. Image by James Steidl

He added to his knowledge by comparing the new concept to something he already understood. In other words, he learned through metaphor.

“Metaphor is for most people a device of the poetic imagination and the rhetorical flourish — a matter of extraordinary rather than ordinary language,” write George Lakoff and Mark Johnson in Metaphors We Live By.

“On the contrary … metaphor is pervasive in everyday life, not just in language but in thought and action. Our ordinary conceptual system, in terms of which we both think and act, is fundamentally metaphorical in nature.”

Metaphor, in other words, is how we think.

Your brain on metaphor

Metaphors work because they compare the concept to something more familiar: cars to horse-drawn carriages, for instance. That helps people understand new, complex or conceptual information — computers, the internet, love — by means of something they already understand.

That makes metaphors shortcuts to understanding.

We use metaphor all the time:

  • We use 50 metaphors per thousand words when we speak, estimates L. Cameron in The Cambridge Handbook of Metaphor and Thought (1980).
  • TV presenters use even more: one in every 25 words, according to Brian F. Bowdle, in The Career of Metaphor (2005).
  • Over a 60-year life span, hypothesizes S. Glucksberg (“Metaphors in conversation,” 1989), one person uses millions of metaphors and other figures of speech.

As Lakoff and Johnson point out, we compare:

  • Arguments to war (Attack your position. Claims are indefensible. Criticisms were right on target. Shoot down arguments.)
  • Time to money (spending time, wasting time, saving time, investing time, costing time)
  • Computers to offices (desktops, files, folders, documents, notepads)

In our brains, love is a journey, problems are puzzles and the internet is a city.

Compare complex concepts

If metaphor, simile and analogy is how we think, then writers can help people think through metaphor.

“The greatest thing by far is to be a master of metaphor. It is the one thing that cannot be learnt from others; and it is also a sign of genius.”
— Aristotle, in the Poetics

That’s the approach Richard Preston used in this extended metaphor in The Demon in the Freezer. The metaphor helps people wrap their brains around the science of smallpox:

Variola particles are built to survive in the air. They are rounded-off rectangles that have a knobby, patterned surface — a gnarly hand-grenade look. Some experts call the particles bricks. … Pox bricks are the largest viruses.

If a smallpox brick were the size of a real brick, then a cold-virus particle would be a blueberry on the brick. But smallpox particles are still extremely small; about three million smallpox bricks laid down in rows would pave the period at the end of this sentence.

Steve Martin used the same approach to bring home a conceptual idea — an art movement — in his novel An Object of Beauty:

This was art that maintained the irony that began in the sixties, and irony provided an escape valve in case the visuals became too pretty. It was as if a pitcher had decided it was gauche to throw fastballs but still threw fastballs in a mockery of throwing fastballs.

“Human thought processes are largely metaphorical,” write Lakoff and Johnson. “The human conceptual system is metaphorically structured and defined. … Metaphor is as much a part of our functioning as our sense of touch, and as precious.”

Why is a metaphor effective?

Theorists from Aristotle to contemporary academic researchers agree: There is power in metaphor. Metaphor makes messages more:

  • Understandable. Our conceptual system is metaphorical, say researchers George Lakoff and Mark Johnson. That means we can help people think — we can clarify complex concepts — through analogy.
  • Persuasive. Study after study shows that metaphoric language is more persuasive than literal language.
  • Believable. Ads with metaphors were 21% more credible than ads without them, according to a study by Mark F. Toncar and James M. Munch.
  • Important. Participants in the Toncar study saw ads with metaphors as 26% more important than ads with literal claims.
  • Memorable. Ads with metaphors were remembered almost twice as well as ads with literal descriptions in a study by Edward F. McQuarrie and David G. Mick.
  • Readable. An archival study of 854 ads showed that Starch Read Most scores — the percentage of people who read most of the ad — were higher for ads with a metaphor in the headline than with a literal headline. Audience members also may spend more time processing metaphors than just plain facts.
  • Likeable. Speakers and other communicators who use metaphors are deemed more appealing than those who do not. They’re seen to be more competent and dynamic and to have better character. And readers like metaphors because it feels good to figure them out.

Tip: Use this list next time one of your approvers wants to strip the metaphors out of your copy.

Bottom line: If you’re communicating technical, scientific or complicated information, use metaphor.

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Sources: Chip Heath and Dan Heath, Made to Stick: Why Some Ideas Survive and Others Die, Random House, 2007

George Lakoff and Mark Johnson, Metaphors We Live By, Chicago, University of Chicago Press, 1980

Edward F. McQuarrie and David G. Mick, “Visual and Verbal Rhetorical Figures under Directed Processing versus Incidental Exposure to Advertising,” Journal of Consumer Research, March 2003

Edward F. McQuarrie, ” The development, change, and transformation of rhetorical style in magazine advertisements 1954-1999,” Journal of Advertising, Dec. 22, 2002

David L. Mothersbaugh, Bruce A. Huhmann, George R. Franke, “Combinatory and Separative Effects of Rhetorical Figures on Consumers’ Efforts and Focus in Ad Processing,” Journal of Consumer Research, March 2002

Richard Preston, The Demon in the Freezer, Random House, October 2002

Pradeep Sopory and James P. Dillard, “The Persuasive Effects of Metaphor: A Meta-Analysis,” Human Communication Research, July 2002

Mark F. Toncar and James M. Munch, “The Influence of Simple and Complex Tropes on Believability, Importance and Memory,” Journal of Marketing Theory and Practice, Dec. 31, 2003

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How to hunt down numerical comparisons

When I wrote an annual report about charitable giving in Kansas City, I wanted to compare the $770 million Kansas Citians gave to charitable organizations in one year to make that number more meaningful to the audience.

Writing descriptive statistics
Search for the data Track down numerical comparisons you need to help readers understand your stats. Image by Kim Reinick

To track down the comparisons, I:

  1. Used the Business Journal’s Book of Lists to report that $770 million was “more than the annual revenues of Blue Cross/Blue Shield” and “more than the combined annual budgets of the metropolitan area’s three largest school districts.”
  2. Checked the Bureau of Labor Statistics to find the city’s average wage. After a few minutes with my calculator, I was able to report: “To achieve that amount, some 24,000 people would have to work full time for a year at Kansas City’s average hourly wage of $15.59.”
  3. Did the math. From the Book of Lists, I learned the size of the student body of one of the city’s largest school districts. I divided $770 million by the number of students. The result: in the neighborhood of $35,000 per student.
  4. Asked: “What would that buy that students might want?” (That helps you sync your metaphors with your topic.) My answer: some kind of car. That year, Jeeps were popular, so I …
  5. Googled “how much is a jeep” to find out what kind of Jeep I could get for $35,000.

As a result, I was able to report that:

The $770 million Kansas Citians give to charity each year is more than enough to buy every student in the Kansas City, Kan., School District a brand-new Jeep Grand Cherokee.

I know, I know. When you think about statistics, you hear:

Blah blah blah data set blah blah blaw standard deviation blah blah blah data analysis blah blah blah summary statistics blah blah blah distribution of your data blah blah blah measure of variability blah blah blah raw data blah blah blah inferential statistics blah blah blah measures of central tendency.

Me too. But anyone who’s mastered seventh-grade math can add some statistical evidence to most stories. All it takes is some extra time with your BFF and research assistant Google, the calculator on your phone and a few minutes to figure out how to figure it out.

That’s important. As Chip Scanlan of the Poynter Institute says:

“Every time you feel your fingers reach for the top row of the keyboard, ask, ‘What’s it like?’”

Resources for writing descriptive statistics

Need a starting point for your statistical analogies? Check out these resources:

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