Comments on: 3 types of press release lead paragraphs to try https://www.wyliecomm.com/2022/07/press-release-lead-paragraph/ Writing workshops, communication consulting and writing services Wed, 20 Dec 2023 14:28:15 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=6.6.2 By: barbara d https://www.wyliecomm.com/2022/07/press-release-lead-paragraph/#comment-484326 Fri, 01 Jul 2016 18:04:34 +0000 http://www.wyliecomm.com/?p=14062#comment-484326 Great ways to shake up PRs.

However, Even if it’s not the “real” published example, I suggest a better version for the one below: Was asleep by “Los Angeles”. (breakfast entrees aren’t fast food?)

“In a Capitol room thick with the smell of fast food and breakfast entrees, proponents of Senate Bill 120 (Padilla-D Los Angeles), the proposed nutrition menu labeling law, dramatically illustrated why this legislation needs to be signed by the Governor.”

In a Sacramento Capitol room, the aromas of fast food entrees permeated the air, sensually illustrating why the Nutrition Menu Labeling law needs to be signed by Governor Schwarzenegger.

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By: Publicity Tips–Write Strong Press Release Leads https://www.wyliecomm.com/2022/07/press-release-lead-paragraph/#comment-483914 Tue, 21 Jun 2016 21:14:51 +0000 http://www.wyliecomm.com/?p=14062#comment-483914 […] For two more ways to write compelling leads, read her article “Write Better Press Release Openers.” […]

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